A Death's Memory

The story's plot is cute, but you really need a proof-reader/editor! I think if you could get hold of those problems and neaten it up a little bit, your story would be better and easier to read.

*smiles* Thanks so much for the feedback! It's much appreciated, I'll work harder on my editing. Sometimes I think I can be so relieved to have finally finished something I'm working on. I can really forget the most basic of things.Thanks for reading Edit: Done some editing hope its now a bit easier on the eyes ^.^