Cover Letter Critique...please read

I'm writing a cover letter for a medicine/telemetry position at a local hospital and I would really appreciate some feedback.


Jane Doe
555 Anywhere USA
[email protected]
November13^th, 2012

NurseRecruitment
1455 Appletree lane
Some Big Hospital

To Whom it May Concern,

I'm interested in the position available at your facility for a telemetry/medicalnurse. I came across your position on the xxx website and was immediately drawn to it. I have always had a passion for telemetry/medicine since I was in nursing school. I believe this opportunity will create a great, solid foundation of my present and future nursing knowledge.

I would make an excellent candidate for your hospital because I am willing to accept challenges while keeping an open mind. I had a clinical rotation at xxx Hospital in the telemetry/medical unit and it was an excellent experience. I was able to learn basic ECG interpretation and how to care for patients with CHF, Renal failure, MI, gastric disorders, etc. During my time in clinical rotations I developed a sharp sense of multitasking while learning to assess situations quickly, administer medications accurately, and work well as part of a team. I'm efficient in Microsoft Word, Excel and PowerPoint. I can apply my knowledge of BLS and ACLS for all my patients.

Working for your institution has always been a dream of mine due to the large, diverse community that you serve. I am also thrilled by all the specialties that your hospital has to offer. Your hospital seems to be a great place to learn and advance your career in the future. My goal is to combine what I have learned in school with what I can learn at your facility to the care of my patients. Overall I plan to improve patient care and satisfaction for all of my patients. Patients in my care will be pleased and satisfied with their care.

I believe that your institution deserves a fresh and enthusiastic new nurse who is willing to take on new and challenging experiences. I want to be that nurse who is constantly learning while providing safe, quality patient care. I look forward to discussing future possibilities of employment with you. Have a great day.

Sincerely,
Jane Doe, RN, B.S.