Resume critique please!

Hi, everyone!

I will be graduating soon, so I am getting my resume together. I am afraid that my resume might suck. I have a couple different versions. I have attached what I have so far.

Please look them over and let me have it. I have my crash helmet on and I am ready for impact!

Thanks a bunch!

Attached Files

• RN_Resume_AN.pdf (36.1 KB, 125 views)
• RN_Resume_AN_II.pdf (98.5 KB, 103 views)

Last edit by canigraduate on Aug 31, '11
Well, no takers so far. Here is the first one (unformatted):Can I. GraduateAddressAddressPhoneEmailOBJECTIVETo secure a position as a registered nurse where I can apply my teamwork, time management, multi-tasking, and critical thinking skills to provide excellent patient care and a positive patient experienceEDUCATIONMy School of Nursing City, STDiploma - Nursing December 2011A Great University City, STBA - Studio Art and Graphic Design May 2000ACTIVITIESMy School of Nursing SGA Volunteer Coordinator August-December 2011School Group Volunteer Coordinator August-December 2011Peer Tutor January-December 2011Community ActivitiesHeart of a Champion 2011Susan G. Komen Race for the Cure 2011WORK HISTORYPatient Care Technician (CNA II) March 2010-PresentMedical Services Floor, My HospitalMy Healthcare System City, ST• Served on Policy and Procedure Committee where I helped develop new policies and streamline existing ones• Responsible for collaborating with RNs to provide patient care• Trained new hiresCertified Nurse Aide I July 2009-March 2010LTC/Assisted Living/RehabMy Healthcare System City, ST• Responsible for collaborating with RNs and LPNs to provide patient care• Trained new hiresGraphic Designer 2002-2009Print Shop City, ST• Responsible for designing multiple products including business stationery, newsletters, brochures, catalogs, and promotional items and preparing them for printing• Provided customer service and account maintenance• Trained new hireServer 2006-2008Seafood Place City, ST• Responsible for providing an excellent dining experienceGraphic Designer 2001-2002Local Real Estate Magazines City, ST• Responsible for designing advertising for Realtors, compiling magazines, entering data for real estate listings, and maintaining archives
Here is the second one:Can I. GraduateNew Graduate RNThe Address • Where I Live###.###.#### • [email protected] PROFILECaring, compassionate, dedicated, and team-oriented professional experienced in time management with superior organization skills. Able to prioritize and handle multiple tasks successfully. Proven expertise in customer service skills. Known for taking on additional responsibilities as necessary. Adaptable to new situations.✓ Listed as NA I and NA II with the STBON✓ Certified in Basic Life Support for the Healthcare Provider✓ Sound knowledge of safety and privacy practicesEDUCATIONMY SCHOOL OF NURSING City, STDiploma - Nursing anticipated graduation December 2011COMMUNITY COLLEGE City, STCertificate - Nurse Aide Training I May 2009GREAT UNIVERSITY City, STBA - Studio Art and Graphic Design May 2000WORK HISTORYMEDICAL SERVICES UNIT, MY HOSPITAL, MY HEALTHCARE SYSTEM City, ST March 2010-PresentPatient Care Technician (CNA II)Assisted general medical services patients with ADLs including toileting, incontinence care, personal care, feeding, bathing, and transfers. Also received training to check blood glucose levels and to monitor surgical drains. Specialized in geriatric patients on NICHE (Nurses Improving Care for Healthsystem Elders) unit. Floated to other units, including PCCU, Neuro, Ortho, and others, to assist as necessary. Demonstrated team mentality, time management skills, and willingness to learn and grow.• Emotionally supported many patients during acute illnesses• Versatility and willingness to tackle challenges led to filling staffing gapsLTC/ALF/REHAB FACILITY, MY HEALTHCARE SYSTEM City, ST July 2009-March 2010Certified Nurse Aide IAssisted residents and patients with ADLs including toileting, personal care, feeding, bathing, and transfers. Also performed customer service functions. Demonstrated ability to prioritize and complete tasks in a timely manner.• Cheerfully completed all tasks delegated by nurse• Conscientious about completing all assigned tasks in a quick, safe mannerPRINT SHOP, INC. City, ST 2002-2009Graphic DesignerHired to work primarily as typesetter and back-up office personnel. Expanded role to include graphic design, building and maintaining digital archives, vendor relations, and customer service. Created organization scheme to improve operational efficiency. Continually streamlined procedures in order to make workflow more efficient.• Increased department efficiency 30% by streamlining operations• Decreased time spent on non-billable tasks 75% by updating technology and organizing archives• Developed and maintained customer relationshipsSEAFOOD PLACE City, ST 2006-2008ServerHired as a hostess and was quickly promoted to server. Praised as “one of my best servers” by former Hospitality Manager. Demonstrated ability to handle customers, correctly input information into computer system, as well as prioritize and complete multiple tasks successfully.• Frequently took over “problem” tables and turned unhappy guests into repeat customers• Constantly helped other servers, hostesses, kitchen staff, and management to ensure restaurant ran smoothlyLOCAL REAL ESTATE MAGAZINES City, ST 2001-2002Graphic DesignerProvided creative ads for area Realtors and real estate companies. Maintained archive of old magazine issues. Helped Data Entry and Sales departments as needed.• Increased department efficiency by creating and maintaining an organized archive• Prevented the need for creating new support positions by assisting in other departmentsLOCAL CAR MAGAZINES City, ST 1998-2000Lead Desktop OperatorAdvanced through a series of increasingly responsible positions to Lead Desktop Operator. Supervised Graphic Designers and ensured that all ads were completed on time. Compiled, paginated, and laid out Car Magazine with assistance from the Proofreader. • Ensured that all magazines were delivered to the press at deadline• Kept department running smoothly by coordinating with Sales and Accounting departments
Love the second resume; you have a good vocabulary--lots of adjectives. With a resume like that you will impress; however the first one is also great, though shorter and less descriptive. Keep the resume one or two pages long maximum. I would send the short one to some places, and the long one to others. See what happens. I can't believe you think either of these resumes suck. Give yourself some credit. Show as much confidence at the interview as you show in your resumes, and you will soon have a job.
Quote from enchantmentdisLove the second resume; you have a good vocabulary--lots of adjectives. With a resume like that you will impress; however the first one is also great, though shorter and less descriptive. Keep the resume one or two pages long maximum. I would send the short one to some places, and the long one to others. See what happens. I can't believe you think either of these resumes suck. Give yourself some credit. Show as much confidence at the interview as you show in your resumes, and you will soon have a job.
I like the second one better, as well. One thing I noticed about the second one is that you stated clearly and quantifiably how you were an asset to your previous employers. I think it has a stronger impact than the first one. I also like the idea of the professional profile....it gives future employers an idea of who you are, in addition to what you can accomplish I might borrow that idea, if you don't mind....
Quote from Blossom GirlI like the second one better, as well. One thing I noticed about the second one is that you stated clearly and quantifiably how you were an asset to your previous employers. I think it has a stronger impact than the first one. I also like the idea of the professional profile....it gives future employers an idea of who you are, in addition to what you can accomplish I might borrow that idea, if you don't mind....